Ned-5 sentence challenge

As i dived under the liquid water,i waved goodbye to my lovely family.I was looking for any treasure.I saw rainbow fish, angel fish and sharks!Suddenly I saw the treasure.Swiftly i grabbed it and of I swam to the surface.

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  1. This is a great peice of writing and many adjectives have been used correctly,however to improve this peice of writing you could build more tention on the reader:)

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